Hi today i left for six flags at 12 because i had bb. We got there at about 1250 ish. First we went on wizzer. Then we got in line for raging bull but it broke down. So then we went on giant drop. Then we went on Viper. Then i left. Then i went caddying and then my brothers bike got stolen. Then i talked to my friend on the phone and they told me that Big Easy Baloons was operating.
All he means is that your TR is pretty short and doesn't even focus on Six Flags in some parts. in my opinion, a TR should be at least about 30 lines, unless it's just a list of coasters you were on and some comments.
it doesnt even have to be 30 lines! just make it where it tells me , someone who wasnt at the park on this day, the interesting parts of your trip, things that may be out of the ordinary, or atleast make an attempt at being somewhat informative!!